BEWARE THE PREPOSITIONAL PHRASE CLUSTER
Prepositions are useful but overdoing them
unconsciously makes for sludgy reading. Four (4) consecutive prepositional
phrases in one sentence may be too many. There are times when even two or three slow
down your writing.
A prepositional
phrase is a group of
words that begins with a preposition, ends with a noun or a pronoun, and
answers a question such as “Which one?” “What kind” “How?” “Where?” or “When?”
There are times you might want to string things out for effect. Doing it unintentionally will not strengthen your writing.
The boat sailed on the water of the harbor behind the breakwater down at the bay.
Chances are the following version will carry your reader forward faster
and easier. There are details the reader will deduce without your help.
The boat sailed into the bay behind the breakwater.
As you can see, eliminating the excessive PPCs can contribute to both more efficient
and more effective writing and reduce unnecessary wordiness.
Common Prepositions:
- about, above, across, after, along, among, around, at
- before, behind, below, beside, between, by
- down, during, except, for, from, in, inside, into
- of, off, on, over, thought, to, toward
- under, until, up, upon, with, without
Use your "Find" function (e.g. Set the Find for "of" and Set "find whole words") to check your prepositional use.
How would you rewrite the following
two sentences for efficiency and effectiveness?
Jerry pulled into the driveway at the
side of the house on the
street where his mother used to
live. (5 PPC’s)
A thud sounded from
the kitchen next door to the study in the house she’d bought in
Smithtown, a town to the north of Hartford. (7 PPC’s)
